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    Bassim is offline VIP Member
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    The man was

    Please, would you take a look at these two sentences and correct my mistakes:

    1. The man was talking to his fellow workers, who listened to him as if he were a Messiah.
    2. They were captivated by his voice which was rising and falling, and was full of emotions.

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    Re: The man was

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    Your first sentence is fine. I'd get rid of the comma in the second sentence and make "emotions" singular.

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