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    Bassim is offline VIP Member
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    The daughter was

    Please, would you take a look at these sentences and correct my mistakes:

    1. The daughter was so angry with her parents that she disowned her family name.
    2. Taking into account the old man's poor health he was in excellent mood.

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    Re: The daughter was

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Please, would you take a look at these sentences and correct my mistakes:

    1. The daughter was so angry with her parents that she disowned her family name.
    2. Taking into account the old man's poor health he was in excellent mood.
    1. If it is possible in a culture to "disown your family name" then I guess that sentence is fine. I would expect someone to "disown their family".
    2. I would change "Taking into account" to "Considering", add a comma after "health" and add "an" between "in" and "excellent".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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