[Essay] scams, cons, hoaxes

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

My favorite subject is science because everything around us concerns science. By learning science I learn how to study and learn, I learn all about the world that we live in, and science helps me to become less gullible. For example, if we learn the truth by learning science, we won't fall for all those scams, cons, hoaxes, and quack medicine schemes! Therefore, the study of science is essential.
 
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Hello Ashiuhto,

The above paragraph is grammatically correct. However, I might change "By learning science I learn how to study and learn" to something like "By studying science I learn to think independently and conduct research", so that the sentence sounds less redundant.

I also might change "become less gullible" to "become better informed." This is simply because it sounds more professional/academic and thus more appropriate to your style of writing.

Best,
In Perfect English
 
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