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    Question Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    Dear teachers

    Does this sentence read well?

    Although in small quantities, water was found on the floor of the second house, but disappeared as the temperature increased.

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    Re: Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    It's OK, but I would prefer "evaporated" rather than "disappeared".

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    Re: Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    Why not just say "Small quantities of water were found..."?

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    Re: Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    I wanted to emphasise that 'water' was the substance found.

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    Re: Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    Quote Originally Posted by Offroad View Post
    I wanted to emphasise that 'water' was the substance found.
    Then put 'water' first;

    Water was found on the floor of the second house, although only in ...

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    Re: Although in small quantities - crime scene investigation

    I thought that in order to not only prepare but also surprise the reader, 'although' should go first.

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