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    Please correct my 2 articles

    1. WilliamGolding atthe beginning in a fist paragraph shows us that there are threecategories of thinking. While he was a boy he discovered thiscategories and later on came to even stranger conclusion that hecould not think at all.
    Thenarrator in the second paragraph presents us his first contact withgrade of thinking. It was in childhood when his teacher brought thesubject of thinking before him .Than the speaker focuses onstatuettes in his headmaster's office. One of them is a nearlynaked woman. The other two present satuette of leopard and musculargentleman. Next the speaker learns about symbols of statuettes. Thenaked woman was the Venus of Milo the epitome of beauty. The leopardwas nature and muscular gentleman symbolized Rodin's Thinker a imageof pure thouhgt.
    Thewriter inquires that he is not integrated, he usually stand beforeteacher's desk and instead of thinking he do meny different things.Even he can't to answer on simple question . All attempts ofconversations with the speaker end in return the student to theclass. The teacher tried force student to think about his actions.

    Afterwardswe found out that the narrator meets Mr. Houghton who always ordershim to think . The speaker wonders about what is the point ofdrinking beacuse of it his teacher is completely ruined . Thatteacher has diffrent point of view about thoughts. He thinks thatclean life and fresh air have a positive influence for thinking. Hepresented his students the monologues about a good life .

    Wehave another person in that essay is Miss Parson. The speaker saysthat she "assured them that her dearest wish was their welfare".The narrator calls that behaviour grade-three of thinking . A crowdof grade three thinkers warm temeselves from their own prejudices.The speaker says also that this categories of thinking applies moresphere feeling rather than thought.

    Gradetwo thinking is the detection of contradictions. Example of thisgrade are that people justifying their habits or his firend Ruth. Sheclaimed that the bible was literally inspired what was a menace toreligion.

    Gradeone is the last presented. The narrator meets an undeniably grade-onethinker at Oxford. It is Professor Einstein. They meet up in a smallbridge and they look inside of the river. Their conversation is notabundant. They said only two German's words. There are something whatconnect them together. The speaker preferrslooking over thebridge into the river than being at school at the time.

    Inconclusion the narrator changed his mind about thinking as a hobby.The speaker tells us that if he would be in teacher's office onceagain he will look at statuattes in different way. The narratorpresents himself like a person referring to religious and politicalsystem.


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    Re: Please correct my 2 articles

    Golding is not at all the source of those ideas. The real person behind it, inspired by German historian Max Weber in part, was the 'father of social sciences,' Wilhelm Dilthey.

    His elementary operations of cognition are:

    -Differentiation -- perceiving gradations of difference by degree
    -Separation -- using the mind to consider one aspect of an object without considering another, e.g. the shape of a leaf, but not its colour, or vice-versa.
    -Abstraction -- focussing in on only one property of an object, such as the colour, while discarding consideration of any other properties;
    -Synthesis -- forming associations and drawing equations between different notions, such as the color of a leaf and the idea of your curtains, before you decide on a color.

    Beyond these elementary operations lies the realm of free imagination (which he didn't consider rational).
    People like Golding and other thinkers who are theorists in education seem to recycle or re-invent the wheel here over and over.

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