Student or Learner
as i have finished my exam .i need to go to home .so please permit me to go home on 6-6-2013.i assure that i will return on 10-6-2013
is this in correct format ? please correct this letter
NOT A NATIVE TEACHER
Welcome to the forums.
The biggest problem with your post is you haven't used capital letters. Please keep it in mind to start each new sentence with a capital letter. The pronoun "I" is always used in its capital form wherever it is, i.e at the beginning, in the middle or at the end. So first see the amendments below.
It's OK, just your request is imperative. I'd rather use this one instead. "Would / Could you please permit me ...?"As I have finished my exam, I need to go to home. So please permit me to go home on 6-6-2013. I will assure you that I will return on 10-6-2013.
Is this in correct format? Please correct this letter.
And "Yours obediently" is, I think, acceptable and common in Indian, but kind of old-fashioned in English.