DaSi14
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Hello, I'm having difficulty with using the hyphen correctly in a sentence. The sentence I have written out is this:
"I admit it’s a bit romanticized, but I consider their conditions as an indication of natural human progression – one of many brief pauses in a punctuated timeline - and I work within a team to facilitate it's movement."
Context: I'm writing a personal statement for medical school. This sentence is drawing from my experience as a certified nursing assistant in a hospital
So I don't know if the hypen is used correctly. I also don't know if the 'it's' between 'facilitate' and 'movement' refers to 'progression' like I intended or it refers 'their'.
I also would like help in revising this sentence. It seems a bit wordy, but that is how I type and I think I can pull it off with the tone I have now. I believe I can shorten it, but it is a pretty strong perspective I hold. I'm not sure if I can combine 'natural human progression and ' brief pauses in a punctuated timeline' together without losing its meaning. Or maybe it can, I'm not sure.
Thanks in advance!
"I admit it’s a bit romanticized, but I consider their conditions as an indication of natural human progression – one of many brief pauses in a punctuated timeline - and I work within a team to facilitate it's movement."
Context: I'm writing a personal statement for medical school. This sentence is drawing from my experience as a certified nursing assistant in a hospital
So I don't know if the hypen is used correctly. I also don't know if the 'it's' between 'facilitate' and 'movement' refers to 'progression' like I intended or it refers 'their'.
I also would like help in revising this sentence. It seems a bit wordy, but that is how I type and I think I can pull it off with the tone I have now. I believe I can shorten it, but it is a pretty strong perspective I hold. I'm not sure if I can combine 'natural human progression and ' brief pauses in a punctuated timeline' together without losing its meaning. Or maybe it can, I'm not sure.
Thanks in advance!