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Hello, I'm having difficulty with using the hyphen correctly in a sentence. The sentence I have written out is this:
"I admit it’s a bit romanticized, but I consider their conditions as an indication of natural human progression – one of many brief pauses in a punctuated timeline - and I work within a team to facilitate it's movement."
Context: I'm writing a personal statement for medical school. This sentence is drawing from my experience as a certified nursing assistant in a hospital
So I don't know if the hypen is used correctly. I also don't know if the 'it's' between 'facilitate' and 'movement' refers to 'progression' like I intended or it refers 'their'.
I also would like help in revising this sentence. It seems a bit wordy, but that is how I type and I think I can pull it off with the tone I have now. I believe I can shorten it, but it is a pretty strong perspective I hold. I'm not sure if I can combine 'natural human progression and ' brief pauses in a punctuated timeline' together without losing its meaning. Or maybe it can, I'm not sure.
Thanks in advance!
Welcome to the forum.
You're not trying to use a hyphen. You're trying to use a dash.
Nevertheless, in your example sentence, the dashes are used correctly. You could also have put "one of many brief pauses in a punctuated timeline" in brackets.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.
I see, thanks for the reply. I completely forgot about dashes. I also realized just twenty seconds ago that I meant to write 'its' rather than "it's".
With the revision part, does the sentence come across as vague/pretentious? It's in regards to tending to patients with the more mundane conditions such as chest pain, kidney stones, etc. that aren't all that exciting. I find beauty in this because it's just another way of affirming the progression of human lives. We all experience moments where we get sick and life seems to come to a halt during that time, hence the" one of many brief pauses in a punctuated timeline "
where the 'brief pauses' are episodes of sickness and the 'timeline' is the course of life being punctuated by many episodes of sickness.
I hope this make sense. I'm trying not to make it sound lofty, but it's difficult to work with a character limit. I honestly do feel this way, but I think I'm conveying it in a pretentious manner.
(By the way, the italics option is unusually hard to work with)
But, on second thoughts, if you really feel this way, maybe you should tell them.