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    #1

    25% off on the first...help rephrase

    25% off for travelers aged 15 or under on first day of travel.

    In the sentence above, I want to say - if you are 15 years or younger, as of the first day of travel you get 25% off. The above sentence could read - you get 25% off on the first day of travel, if you are 15 years or under.

    I want to clear this confusion and rephrase it. I have tried a few ways below, please check.

    If you are 25 years or under on the first day of the validity of the pass, you get 35% off

    35% off for travelers aged 25 years or under on the first day of the validity of the pass.

    Can you help me make it short? Thanks in advacne.

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    Re: 25% off on the first...help rephrase

    I believe this is what the fine print is for. Simply say that those 15 and under get 25% off.

    Then, in the terms and conditions elsewhere explain that the person has to be 15 when the travel begins.

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    Re: 25% off on the first...help rephrase

    Thanks for the reply. Unfortuately, I can't write it in the terms and conditions.

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    Re: 25% off on the first...help rephrase

    Then I would do it as two sentences.

    25% off for travelers under 16. Must be under 16 on date travel begins.

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