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    In the dark summer sky

    I am wondering if my sentences are correct. Please would you correct my mistakes. I would like to know if I could use the word "pinprick" in this kind of sentences.

    1. In the dark summer sky twinkled thousands pinpricks of stars.
    2.Watching across the sea, he saw the pinpricks of village homes flickering in darkness.

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    Re: In the dark summer sky

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are correct. Please would you correct my mistakes. I would like to know if I could use the word "pinprick" in this kind of sentence.

    1. In the dark summer sky twinkled thousands of pinpricks of starlight.
    2. Watching across the sea, he saw the pinpricks of the lights of village homes flickering in darkness.
    See my suggested amendments above.

    In your opening third sentence, you needed either "... in these kinds of sentences" or "... in this kind of sentence".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: In the dark summer sky

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are correct. Please would you correct my mistakes. I would like to know if I could use the word "pinprick" in this kind of sentences.

    1. In the dark summer sky twinkled thousands pinpricks of stars.
    2.Watching across the sea, he saw the pinpricks of village homes flickering in darkness.
    While I understand the meaning of what you wrote, I find the use of "pinprick" there to be a bit unusual.

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