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    After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

    After lunch break, the students weredivided into three groups, during whichthey discussed what they should do to improve the cleanliness of the school.

    Is the comma needed? Thanks.

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    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which they discussed what they should do to improve the cleanliness of the school.

    Is the comma needed? Thanks.
    Yes. And 'during' is wrong unless they were discussing this while they were being divided into groups.

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    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

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    Yes. And 'during' is wrong unless they were discussing this while they were being divided into groups.
    As"during" is wrong what word should be used instead? Thanks.

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    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

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    #5

    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

    "improve the cleanliness of the school. " sounds wordy and pretentious. "make the school cleaner" is better.

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    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

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    after
    Thanks, Rover.

    After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, after which...
    Is the sentence OK, since it starts with 'After' followed by another 'after'.

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    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

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    Thanks, Rover.

    After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, after which...
    Is the sentence OK, since it starts with 'After' followed by another 'after'.
    Why not? After breakfast, I dug the garden, after which I did some study, after which I ate lunch, after which I had a nap ..."
    It's not elegant, but you can't use an inappropriate word to solve issues of elegance.

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    #8

    Re: After lunch break, the students were divided into three groups, during which...

    Quote Originally Posted by LeTyan View Post
    "improve the cleanliness of the school. " sounds wordy and pretentious. "make the school cleaner" is better.

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    I disagree that it sounds pretentious. There is nothing wrong with your suggestion but nothing wrong with the original.

    Try this: ...groups and then each group discussed...
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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