An article for school magazine - Please check for me,thanks!

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K.N.

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Recent reports have stated that more young people in Hong Kong are overweight and unfit than ever before. Health experts are becoming worried about the life styles of young people who do less exercise than they should and who have an unbalanced diet.
Write an article for your school magazine giving reasons for this problem and suggesting how young people can improve their fitness.In your article,try to persuade the students in your school to adpot a healthier life style.


Please do check if there is any mistake!(for format,grammar and spelling)(i think there's a lot!)thanks!

Title:Take care of your buddy!
Eat,eat and eat!Nowadays,many teens are overweight and unfit. Many surveys had found out that more and more young people suffer from obesity,damaging their health.Therefore, stop eating too much!That is not alone about your appearance, but also abut your health.
Lack of sport is a major problem causing teenagers overweight.Without consumption of calorioes, they will accumlate in your body. Then,you will get fatter and fatter.Unfortunately, most young people love playing video games and computer rather than sport.Of course, the intake of the diet cannot be cancelled out.Overweight body is resulted eventually.
Another reason is due to high content of calories in the diet.Eat too much calories is harmful as they will deposit in our blood vessels.This leads to fat bodies and then heart dieases.
Youngsters are under stress as the school work is so busy.Eating candies and snack is a common method to relieve pressure.However,it is unwise because candies and snack doom you to gain weight easily.
In fact,we can only use one rule to solve the problem-the uptake should be always greater than the intake !
Playing sport is a good method to lose weight.Besides,you will feel more comfortable after played sport.Hence, you cann see it as a relaxing practise to relieve stress.
To avoid the high content of calories,you should have a balanced diet. Don't eat too much snack!Eat much more fruits and vegetables instead of meat and carbohydrates.They also can make you feel full.
Our bodies are belonged to us.Nobody know it better than ourselves and we will suffer if there is anything going wrong of our bodies.Being fit is good for our health and hence we should keep fit from now on!Care about your buddy - body,let's keep fit today!
 

SunnyDay

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Heavy stylistic editing - hope you don't mind.

Title:Take care of your buddy!

Eat, eat, eat! Nowadays, many teens are overweight and unfit. Numerous surveys have found that more and more young people suffer from obesity, which increases one's chances of getting diabetes and puts one at risk for heart problems later on. Losing weight isn't just about appearance -it's about health.

Lack of participation in sports is a major problem that causes teenagers to be overweight. If you don't burn up calorioes, they will accumlate in your body, causing you to gain weight. Unfortunately, most young people love playing video and computer games more than sports. Of course, the intake of calories cannot be ignored, and obesity is the eventual result.

Another cause of obesity is the high content of calories in the diet. Eating too many calories is harmful as they will create fatty deposits in the blood vessels. This leads to obesity and heart diease.

For youngsters under stress due to heavy loads of school work, eating candies and snacks are a common method to relieve pressure. However, it is unwise because candies and snacks cause you to gain weight easily.

In fact,we can only use one rule to solve the problem-the rate at which you burn calories should always be greater than the rate at which you comsume them!

Playing sports is a good method of losing weight. Besides,you will feel more comfortable after playing sports. You can think of it as a relaxing practise to relieve stress.

To avoid the high intake of calories, you should have a balanced diet. Don't eat too many snacks! Eat much more fruits and vegetables than meat and carbohydrates. Fruits will also make you feel full.

Our bodies belong to us. Nobody knows our body better than ourself, and we will suffer if there is anything that goes wrong with them. Being fit is good for your health, and you should keep fit from now on! Care about your buddy - your body- let's keep fit today!
 
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