Student or Learner
Any erros in these two sentences:
The president affirms that the U.S will take military action in response to Syria's deadly chemical bomb attack killing thousands of
civilians, including children.
The president affirms that the U.S will take military action in response to Syria's deadly chemical bomb attack causing thousands dead, including children.
Which sentence is better? Also, can I put "against" to replace "in response to", would "against" sounds better? What is one way or techniques that I can correct sentences on my own with having to ask someone because even sometimes after I have looked my sentences several times and made changes several times, and have someone look at it. There is still some mistakes here and there. Please Help.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.