Could you check these sentences, please?

[sondra]

Hello


Do these sentences need to be corrected?


1.‘Don’t be afraid, darling. It’s not so easy to strangle me. I think I could protect myself against your passionate arms.

2.No one has ever died out of it.

3.They coudn't imagine their life without each other.



4.And then when she came to herself she realized that something, that she was most afraid of had happened.

5.The lifeless body of her admired husband lay on their bed next to her...

Thanks

 

[Rover_KE]

Are these your own sentences, Sondra? If so, what was your purpose in writing them?

If you had been a student rather than an 'Other', we'd have thought this was homework.

 

[sondra]

No, this is not homework and I am not a student. These sentences are taken from a short story.

 

[Rover_KE]

2 and 4 need to be corrected.

The context would have been helpful...title and author for example.

Rover

 

[sondra]

This is my mother's short story. (Writing short stories is her hobby). It is posted on this website http://storymash.com/u/Tamara35/vifiguke/ The name of the story is ''The Love''.

 

[SoothingDave]

I would use "lives" in #3.

 

[MikeNewYork]

Hello


Do these sentences need to be corrected?


1.‘Don’t be afraid, darling. It’s not so easy to strangle me. I think I could protect myself against your passionate arms.

2.No one has ever died out of it.

3.They coudn't imagine their life without each other.



4.And then when she came to herself she realized that something, that she was most afraid of had happened.

5.The lifeless body of her admired husband lay on their bed next to her...

Thanks

I would also use "lives" in number 3. In number 4, the word "herself" is problematic. On first reading, "came to herself" threw me. Then I realized that "came to" probably meant "woke up". The word "herself" is not needed there.