[Essay] Travelling

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How to reframe this sentence better...

Many of the wonderful moments we often share, certainly have a connection with any of the trips we conduct and hence the excitement they inflame in us causes us to change our notion towards all aspects of life related to nature.
 

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How to reframe this sentence better...

Many of the wonderful moments we often share, certainly have a connection with any of the trips we conduct and hence the excitement they inflame in us causes us to change our notion towards all aspects of life related to nature.

Try breaking up the sentence into 2 pieces. That will help a lot.
 

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Or... When we travel, we often see beautiful things that make us feel even closer to nature.
 

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Or... When we travel, we often see beautiful things that make us feel even closer to nature.

An even better idea! ;-)
 

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Thank you, Barb_D
 

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Please don't write new posts to say "Thank you". Simply click on the Like button on any post you found helpful. It can be very time-consuming for us to open a thread thinking that there are new questions or new responses, only to find that it's simply a thank you (or in your case, two of them).
 
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