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    Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    I need help, which is the correct way to submit this thesis statement?

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    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control. Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control, so as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control; Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tamfl24 View Post
    I need help, which is the correct way to submit this thesis statement?

    Thesis Statement:

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control. Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control, so as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control; Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.
    The third one, with the capital T in "Therefore" is incorrect. With a lower-case t it would be okay gramatically. I'd use either of the first two with no real difference in meaning.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tamfl24 View Post
    I need help, which is the correct way to submit this thesis statement?

    Thesis Statement:

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control. Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control, so as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control; Therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving test and screenings.
    I would pluralize "test".

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    So would I. Missed that.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    Does this seem correct? and sound right? Thank you for all your help :)

    Road safety requires a driver to be in good health and control; therefore, as the senior population increases, states should push for mandatory driving tests and screenings.

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    I'd add an "in" before "control" - in control. The "in good health" doesn't really transfer the "in" very well.

    I thought I was clear when I said I'd use either of the first two, but the third was grammatical with the lower-case t. You have produced a grammatically correct sentence.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Which is the best way to submit my thesis statement?

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    I'd add an "in" before "control" - in control. The "in good health" doesn't really transfer the "in" very well.

    I thought I was clear when I said I'd use either of the first two, but the third was grammatical with the lower-case t. You have produced a grammatically correct sentence.
    I agree. I missed that. We're even.

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