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  1. dodonaomik's Avatar
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    #1

    while being ~~~~~~ as

    I encountered the following sentences and they puzzled me:
    1) Although she had signed a pledge of abstinence while being an adolescent, Frances Williard was 35 years old before she chose to become a temperance activist.
    2) Although she had signed a pledge of abstinence as an adolescent, Frances Williard was 35 years old before she chose to become a temperance activist.

    BOOK: "while being" is not succinct enough, so the 1st is wrong.
    Me: In my opinion, although the 1st is not as good as the second, it is not wrong.


    Am I wrong? Thank you for helping me!
    Last edited by dodonaomik; 07-Nov-2013 at 06:01.

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    Re: while being ~~~~~~ as

    #1 is just about possible if the intended meaning is 'while behaving (as if she was) an adolescent.' but this is unlikely.

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    #3

    Re: while being ~~~~~~ as

    Quote Originally Posted by dodonaomik View Post
    BOOK: "while being" is not succinct enough, so the 1st is wrong.
    The first isn't wrong because it isn't succinct enough. The book is lying*.
    It's wrong because "while being an adolescent" isn't natural and would tend to mean what 5jj says, which is not the intended meaning.

    * It's pulling an answer out of its a hat because it doesn't know the reason.

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    Re: while being ~~~~~~ as

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    * It's pulling an answer out of its a hat because it doesn't know the reason.
    I think I'll save that. It could be very useful for quite a few posts that quote weird and wonderful 'rules' and explanations from books.

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    #5

    Re: while being ~~~~~~ as

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    #1 is just about possible if the intended meaning is 'while behaving (as if she was) an adolescent.' but this is unlikely.
    Thank youI have understood your meaning.

    Yesterday when I was on a bus, I can't forget the sentence and suddenly I felt the following sentence is not bad:

    Although she had signed a pledge of abstinence while she was an adolescent, Frances Williard was 35 years old before she chose to become a temperance activist.



    Now, I feel the sentence is not good because , in the former clause, the word "she" is repeated.

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    Re: while being ~~~~~~ as

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    I think I'll save that. It could be very useful for quite a few posts that quote weird and wonderful 'rules' and explanations from books.
    But English which many Chinese have learnt, to speak frankly, is just "book English", "dumb English".
    Particularly when many many Chinese students find that they couldn't touch English after graduation, some of them repent and scold the Ministry of education of the People's Republic of China.

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