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    She felt constantly on edge

    She felt constantly on edge every time she went into the district, reaching a tipping point in 2010 when she was manhandled by a gangster while she interacted with a prostitute.

    I rephrased above sentence, Is it correct?

    She felt constantly on edge every time she went into the district. She reached a tipping point in 2010 when she was manhandled by a gangster while she interacted with a prostitute.

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    Re: She felt constantly on edge

    Yes, that's fine.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Yes, that's fine.
    I want to write these type of sentence (using participle after comma, as here "reaching"). So, please suggest me which part of grammar should I refer?
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    Re: She felt constantly on edge

    Quote Originally Posted by shibli.aftab View Post
    while she interacted with a prostitute.
    It's correct, but it sounds a little odd to me- what was she doing? Talking?

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    Re: She felt constantly on edge

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    It's correct, but it sounds a little odd to me- what was she doing? Talking?
    Yes, She was talking.

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    #6

    Re: She felt constantly on edge

    Then why not say so? 'She interacted with a prostitute' makes it sound as if they were doing business.
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 28-Nov-2013 at 13:31. Reason: Fixing typos

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    Re: She felt constantly on edge

    I was going to suggest "while she was interacting" (progressive). But since we now know she was talking to the prostitute when the mugging happened, that's how I'd say it - Still progressive. This is the usual way of saying that B happened at some time during which A was happening. B interrupts A.

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