Please check my letter for university(admission office):

I'm writing to you to express my great desire for studying Bachelor's Degree at the Computer Science. I have always found Computing and New Technologies a fascinating field of study. I chose to study at your university, because it would help me in my career.

Today I'm studing at the UCLan university, and I'm a first year student. I prefer study in your university because I sure that I can take more knowledge from your university than here.

Pursuing a Computing Major is my long-term goal, and I would like to start by earning my Bachelorís Degree in Computer Science from your university.

P.S. - please help with creating this letter because I'm never writed\sended same letter
P.P.S. - I'm really sorry if I have grammar mistake in my message... just I'm only start study this language

Thanks in advance