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    "balance"

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    "Super powers tend to encourage small countries to fight within each others so they don't unite as one to take on the super powers."

    "Super powers tend to encourage small countries to balance each others so they don't............................................. "

    Can the first sentence be rephrased as the second? If not, what is the right way to do it?
    Is the the word "balance" used properly here?

    Thank you

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    Re: "balance"

    Quote Originally Posted by LeTyan View Post
    "Super powers tend to encourage small countries to fight within each others so they don't unite as one to take on the super powers."

    "Super powers tend to encourage small countries to balance each others so they don't............................................. "
    Neither sentence is natural. It is difficult to repair either. I would write something like:

    (The) superpowers encourage conflict between small countries so that these small countries do not unite against the superpowers.

    I am not very happy with that. I hope someone else can come up with something better.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 21-Jan-2014 at 10:42. Reason: typos

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    Re: "balance"

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    Neither sentence is natural. It is difficult to repair either. I would write something like:

    (The) superpowers encourage conflict between small countries so that these small countries do not unite against the superpowers.

    I am not very happy with that. I hope someone else can come up with something better.
    So is the part "encourage small countries to do something" not natural?

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    Re: "balance"

    Quote Originally Posted by LeTyan View Post
    So is the part "encourage small countries to do something" not natural?
    I think 5jj's sentence is very good. At most I would change the second "superpowers" to avoid repetition -- something like "more powerful countries".

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    Re: "balance"

    Quote Originally Posted by MikeNewYork View Post
    I think 5jj's sentence is very good. At most I would change the second "superpowers" to avoid repetition -- something like "more powerful countries".
    I am aware that 5jj's sentence is better and more conscice. But why is my sentence wrong? In which way is the part "encourage small countries to fight (within) each other" wrong? Is it just wordy or is there something wrong fundamentally. Because I have heard words like"encourage somebody to do something ". Why can't I just apply it to here?

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    Re: "balance"

    Quote Originally Posted by LeTyan View Post
    I am aware that 5jj's sentence is better and more conscice. But why is my sentence wrong? In which way is the part "encourage small countries to fight (within) each other" wrong? Is it just wordy or is there something wrong fundamentally. Because I have heard words like"encourage somebody to do something ". Why can't I just apply it to here?
    Your "within each other" is not correct.

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