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I'm a new member here, I've been learning English sice I was in my Junior School, now I wanna practice my Writing skills here, hope everyone can give me some advice and I'll be very appriciated~~~~~here goes the article:
People from different countries speak entirely different languages.. However, it does exists one type of language which connects all the people all around the world without misunderstanding, that magic item is the Music.
It is impossible to live in a world without music, it can not only relieve your stress after work and help yourself calm down, but also turn you on and have passion to reach your dream. An elegantly fluent piano melody is just like a crystal-clear stream of water flowing through your outrageous inner world, irrigating your hearts; on the other side, a tedious life could be on fire with an energetic pop music and let you wave with the rythem of love.
There are many different kinds of music throughout the world. One may argue about the importance of their traditional own music comparing with the international one. In my opinion, they are the same on the scale of music. Because each type is an outcome of many years of music history, it belongs to a nation of their own. We should remember and carry forward our own type, at the same time, show our respect and appreciation to others’.
Traditional music can bring foreigners to a brand-new world, let them start a new adventure which they’ve never had before, while the international music injects a fresh blood to us and let us feel every cell of their years of culture.
Music is a world language for people living under the same sky, we own and share the music together.
Thank you so much for correcting my English. I'll learn to use punctuations well in the future.
I'm a new member here,
I've been learning English sice I was in my Junior School,
now I wanna practice my Writing skills here,
hope everyone can give me some advice and I'll be very appriciated~~~~~
here goes the article:
1. "Wanna" is fine for Beatles songs, but it's no good for writing standard English. Use "want to."
2. You have five sentences there. Use periods, not commas or dashes.
3. Only capitalize proper nouns (as you did with English) and the first words of sentences. Junior school and writing are neither.
4. "I'll be very appreciated" means we'll appreciate you. We do appreciate you, but I think you meant "I'd appreciate it" or "I'd be very appreciative."