More thoughts on this text.
Intro should be "Statement of Position" explaining the aims of the exposition. In this case, I think it's a general "introduction".
Areas that the student needs to work on...I think the genre of exposition in general. Then shematic structure. Also modality...overuse of can. Linking expressions..Not sure if I would put this in Mode?
What do you think?
just a few more thought on the text...
The more i look at it i am in doubt whether its an exposition or a discussion!!
what do you think?
Exposition argues a case and discussion discusses it i guess!!!
How can i provide identity for this student?