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    #1

    I want to hold it again.

    Hello.

    One of my students wrote in her writing assignment. (The sentences below are actually a connected piece of text):

    1. I enjoyed playing the saxophone with my friends.
    2. I was a member of the brass band club.
    3. I loved our club and playing the sax.
    4. I had to practice hard because we had a concert.
    5. It was very hard, but I want to hold it again.

    Would #4 sound better if I corrected it to "We had to practice hard because we had a concert."?

    The "I want to hold it" part in #5 doesn't sound OK to me. I would correct it to "I want to play in a concert again."

    Are my corrections OK?

    Thank you.

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    #2

    Re: I want to hold it again.

    Hello Fujimino,

    (I'm not a teacher, but a native English speaking ALT in Japan)

    I think number 4 is okay using "I" (maybe the other members in the brass band club didn't need to practice). The sentence also sounds fine using "we".

    Number 5 sounds strange to me. I agree with your correction.

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    #3

    Re: I want to hold it again.

    I is OK, but we does sound better to me for #4 as she is talking about playing in a band. I feel the same way as both of you about #5.

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    #4

    Re: I want to hold it again.

    I assumed that she wanted to hold the saxophone again.

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    #5

    Re: I want to hold it again.

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    I assumed that she wanted to hold the saxophone again.
    Thank you, 5jj.

    (The meaning of) the "hold" she tried to convey is often seen in the passive:

    "The concert will be held at the Royal Albert Hall."

    The original sentence is ambiguous, isn't it?

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    #6

    Re: I want to hold it again.

    Unless she singlehandedly organised the concert she refers to, she can't say "I held a concert" or "I want to hold a concert again". Only the organiser can say that. She could say "I want to take part in a concert again". I, too, thought she meant she liked the feeling of holding a saxophone and wanted to hold one again.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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