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    Please correct my English

    My daughter goes to a private teacherís home for learning English. We want to discontinue the course due to some reasons. Iíll send whatsapp to the teacher as follows:

    Hello Miss.x
    Every time when we go to your home, we have to carry a school bag which is very heavy and we have a long way to walk. Hence, I am sorry to inform you that Joey will not go to your home for learning English from March onwards.

    I would be obligied if you could correct my English or made it simple.

    Thanks.


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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by queeniech View Post
    a school bag which is very heavy
    Why not simply say "a very heavy school bag"?

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by Matthew Wai View Post
    Why not simply say "a very heavy school bag"?
    Thanks Matthew

    Do you think if the above message is too long if I send whatsapp?

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by queeniech View Post
    Dear Miss x,

    I am sorry to inform you that Joey will not be coming for any more English lessons after the end of February. Our long walk to your home with a heavy school bag is getting too much for us.

    Thank you for all you have done for him.

    Yours sincerely,

    [Your name]
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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by queeniech View Post
    Thanks Matthew

    Do you think if the above message is too long if I send whatsapp?
    A message containing just a few sentences like yours is not long.
    Also, I don't deserve your thanks because I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Unless Whatsapp has a limit to the number of characters you can put in one message, it's fine.

    Feel free to thank anyone whose comments you find helpful - there is no rule saying you can only thank teachers!
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 27-Feb-2014 at 14:33. Reason: Typo
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
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    Thanks Rover

    Is it possible to use 'will not come' in place of 'will not be coming'? I googled the meaning of 'getting too much for us' but I couldn't find it. 'What does this phrase mean ?

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    there is no rule saying you can only thank teachers!
    5jj once told me there are hundreds of unwritten rules!

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Quote Originally Posted by queeniech View Post
    I googled the meaning of 'getting too much for us' but I couldn't find it.
    May I take it to mean "getting tiring for us"?

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    Re: Please correct my English

    Yes.

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