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    #1

    a description that ...

    Question: Can "a description" be followed by a that-clause?

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    In the email, please include a description that the product has been shipped.

    I guess there might be better words than "description" here, but what I'd like to know is whether "a description" can be followed by a that-clause or not.

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    #2

    Re: a description that ...

    Not in that context, no.

    I have a seen a description that confused me.
    I have seen a description which confused me.

    For your context, "Please include confirmation that the product has been shipped" would be better.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 04-Mar-2014 at 15:36. Reason: Typo
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #3

    Re: a description that ...

    "A mention that..." doesn't work either here, does it?

    ... a mention that the product has been shipped.

    ("Please mention that the product has been shipped" would work, though.)

    How about "a statement that..." and "information that"?

    ... a statement that the product has been shipped.
    ... information that the product has been shipped.
    Last edited by herbivorie; 04-Mar-2014 at 13:40.

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    Re: a description that ...

    I don't find the use of the word "mention" natural at all in this context. If you mention something, you don't make a big thing of it, you throw it into a conversation, you make a passing comment about it. In your context, the confirmation that the product has been shipped is of vital importance. You don't just want to mention it.
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    Re: a description that ...

    I see. Then I won't use "mention" in that case.

    In other cases where I want to "mention" something, can "a mention" be followed by a that-clause? (I guess not.)

    How about "a statement" and "information"? Can they be followed by a that-clause? (I guess they can.)

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    Re: a description that ...

    Quote Originally Posted by herbivorie View Post
    I see. Then I won't use "mention" in that case.

    In other cases where I want to "mention" something, can "a mention" be followed by a that-clause? (I guess not.)

    How about "a statement" and "information"? Can they be followed by a that-clause? (I guess they can.)
    Please give example sentences showing how you wish to use the constructions you are querying.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #7

    Re: a description that ...

    Quote Originally Posted by herbivorie View Post
    Question: Can "a description" be followed by a that-clause?

    For example,

    In the email, please include a description that the product has been shipped.

    I guess there might be better words than "description" here, but what I'd like to know is whether "a description" can be followed by a that-clause or not.
    I agree with emsr about "confirmation". You could also use "notification".

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    Re: a description that ...

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Please give example sentences showing how you wish to use the constructions you are querying.
    In the email notifying him of your success, please include a mention that I'm looking forward to seeing him.
    This usage of "mention that" is incorrect, isn't it?

    As for the question about "a statement" and "information", I meant the same situation as the first question in this thread.
    In the email, please include a statement that the product has been shipped.
    In the email, please include information that the product has been shipped.
    Do they both work?

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