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Can anyone help me to correct my essay?
Books vs Movies (capitalize both words)
There are different ways to get a story from different sources in modern times. Books have been good sources for stories, but movies are getting more popular and have the same story with wrong word the books. Why auxiliary verb needed people still reading books, and others are prefer watching should be an infinitive not a gerund the movies? Reading books and watching movies have a lot in common but there are some differences that makes the readers remain faithful to reading books.
First, books keep a person’s mind going. A mind is filled with questionspunctuation and as the wheels in your head are turning, your brain is being put to more use rather than if you let it go numb during a movie. It is basically the same as watching television versus going outside and playing for a couple of hours. Movies are like a version of a television show, wrong punctuationthey are just longer. Everyone has heard that if you watch TV for too long it is not good for you, that you should pick up a good book instead.comma splice Should not the same rule apply when it comes to watching a movie?
You are contrasting movies and books but you go off on another idea of television. Keep on topic and show how books contrast to movies. In this paragraph you are trying to show how the brain reacts differently to movies and books. (Give more examples of that.)
Films can do a lot of different things. They can bring whole worlds to life before our eyes, make characters into living, breathing flesh and blood. They can have us on the edge of our seats as vicious battle scenes are fought right before us, have us sobbing over a death, a heartbreak or smiling with joy. Films can make us see a lot of things – sometimes things that even books cannot do so well. They are a pure escape – there's nothing like sitting in the cinema, devoid of any other distraction, focused completely on the story playing on the screen.
(This paragraph does not have enough on how books are in contrast. More needed to show your point.)
In general films are great, but they just don't have the same inclusion that books have. You're merely an observer: you aren't feeling everything the character feels, aren't reading every single one of their innermost thoughts, all of their doubts and fears and hopes. Films let you observe everythingBooks let you feel everything, know everything and live everything. With a book, you can be the hero who kills the demon with one twirl of your blade. You can be the girl who battles cancer, along with all the pain and uncertainty that comes with it. You can be a demigod, you can be an alien or an angel, a god, a villain, a hero. You can be in love, you can hate, and you can triumph or can lose. You can be anything and everything. There are no limits and no restrictions. Nothing is impossible, nothing is out of reach.
Nice description of what happens in books, but next to no contrast with movies. ( comment from teacher )
People who love reading are frequently disappointed by the movie versions of their favorite books. There have been some great films made from books, but typically movie versions of books tend to frustrate readers because they are not just like the book. When a film director works from an adapted screenplay, the results are not the same as reading the book for various reasons. For example, a film that precisely follows a novel likely would be too long for most audiences to sit through at a single showing, so some things must be left out. Also, a book can easily convey things to the reader that are much more difficult for a movie to convey, such as background information about the setting, the history and nature of characters' relationships or even what characters are thinking at certain times.
As we have seen, there are many differences between reading books and watching movies wrong punctuation however I believe this is not an opinion essay that books are much better than the movies, of course movies can bring whole worlds to life before our eyes, make characters into living, breathing flesh and blood however wrong punctuation books let us live everything, it brings our imagination up to a whole new level. Books allow for more character development. People love the feeling of "getting to know" a character through the pages of a book.
There are several things that you need to work on. When you write a comparison/contrast essay you need have a balance. You cannot just say the things are different and then go on to just discuss one of the items. You need to incorporate language which shows the similarities or differences. Look in the list of transitions and there are words you can use. (advise from teacher)
Can anyone help me to correct my essay?
Books vs Movies (capitalize both words)
There are different ways to get a story from different sources in modern times. Books have been good sources for stories, but movies are getting more popular and have the same story with wrong word the books. Why auxiliary verb needed people still reading books, and others are prefer watching should be an infinitive not a gerund the movies? Reading books and watching movies have a lot in common but there are some differences that makes the readers remain faithful to reading books.
First, books keep a person’s mind going. A mind is filled with questionspunctuation and as the wheels in your head are turning, your brain is being put to more use rather than if you let it go numb during a movie. It is basically the same as watching television versus going outside and playing for a couple of hours. Movies are like a version of a television show, wrong punctuationthey are just longer. Everyone has heard that if you watch TV for too long it is not good for you, that you should pick up a good book instead.comma splice Should not the same rule apply when it comes to watching a movie?
You are contrasting movies and books but you go off on another idea of television. Keep on topic and show how books contrast to movies. In this paragraph you are trying to show how the brain reacts differently to movies and books. (Give more examples of that.)
Films can do a lot of different things. They can bring whole worlds to life before our eyes, make characters into living, breathing flesh and blood. They can have us on the edge of our seats as vicious battle scenes are fought right before us, have us sobbing over a death, a heartbreak or smiling with joy. Films can make us see a lot of things – sometimes things that even books cannot do so well. They are a pure escape – there's nothing like sitting in the cinema, devoid of any other distraction, focused completely on the story playing on the screen.
(This paragraph does not have enough on how books are in contrast. More needed to show your point.)
In general films are great, but they just don't have the same inclusion that books have. You're merely an observer: you aren't feeling everything the character feels, aren't reading every single one of their innermost thoughts, all of their doubts and fears and hopes. Films let you observe everythingBooks let you feel everything, know everything and live everything. With a book, you can be the hero who kills the demon with one twirl of your blade. You can be the girl who battles cancer, along with all the pain and uncertainty that comes with it. You can be a demigod, you can be an alien or an angel, a god, a villain, a hero. You can be in love, you can hate, and you can triumph or can lose. You can be anything and everything. There are no limits and no restrictions. Nothing is impossible, nothing is out of reach.
Nice description of what happens in books, but next to no contrast with movies. ( comment from teacher )
People who love reading are frequently disappointed by the movie versions of their favorite books. There have been some great films made from books, but typically movie versions of books tend to frustrate readers because they are not just like the book. When a film director works from an adapted screenplay, the results are not the same as reading the book for various reasons. For example, a film that precisely follows a novel likely would be too long for most audiences to sit through at a single showing, so some things must be left out. Also, a book can easily convey things to the reader that are much more difficult for a movie to convey, such as background information about the setting, the history and nature of characters' relationships or even what characters are thinking at certain times.
As we have seen, there are many differences between reading books and watching movies wrong punctuation however I believe this is not an opinion essay that books are much better than the movies, of course movies can bring whole worlds to life before our eyes, make characters into living, breathing flesh and blood however wrong punctuation books let us live everything, it brings our imagination up to a whole new level. Books allow for more character development. People love the feeling of "getting to know" a character through the pages of a book.
There are several things that you need to work on. When you write a comparison/contrast essay you need have a balance. You cannot just say the things are different and then go on to just discuss one of the items. You need to incorporate language which shows the similarities or differences. Look in the list of transitions and there are words you can use. (advise from teacher)
