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    follow my own way

    Is the following wording natural and acceptable?

    However, my parents are afraid that I might not earn enough money to support my livelihood when I grow up. Instead, they hope me to choose another career of the science and engineering. Nevertheless, Iím determined to make/follow my own way.

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    Re: follow my own way

    I am not a teacher.

    I'm afraid it isn't.

    The first sentence can only start with "However," if there is a preceding sentence saying something contradictory and leading logically to this one. (This may be the case, but I don't know that.)
    You don't support your livelihood, your livelihood is what supports you.

    The second sentence has many errors in it; you should try again.

    The third sentence is not too bad.
    I personally find it rather irritating to read a series of sentences that start with adverbs, but that is a question of style.
    Last edited by Roman55; 10-Mar-2014 at 09:06.

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    Re: follow my own way

    On the assumption that these sentences are meant to follow those contained in your other thread, where you said that you're good at art, then the "preceding sentence saying something contradictory" exists.

    If you are planning to post a whole piece of writing broken down into two or three sentences at a time and all in separate posts, you will find that you are frequently asked if there is a relevant preceding sentence.

    Can I recommend that you post the entire piece of writing in the "Editing and Writing Topics" section where someone will look at the piece as a whole?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 10-Mar-2014 at 00:24.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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