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    XYZ is the solemn place, where priesthood and laity assemble to pray for world peace.

    XYZ is the solemn place, where priesthood and laity assemble to pray for world peace and continually pledge to devote themselves to Buddhism and increasingly strive forth in their daily practice.

    1. Is the comma optional?
    2. I sense something is not quite right in the bold part in relation to the earlier part of the sentence. ( "increasingly strive forth in their daily practice" means the priests and lay believers will do their best in the daily activities of their religion and also in propagating the religion to non-believers.)

    I want to rephrase it but I am at a loss.

    Thanks.
    Last edited by Tan Elaine; 20-Mar-2014 at 16:30.

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    Re: XYZ is the solemn place, where priesthood and laity assemble to pray for world pe

    XYZ is the solemn place where priesthood and laity assemble to pray for world peace and pledge themselves to devote themselves to Buddhism, continue to uphold the tenets of their faith and strive to persuade non-believers.

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    Re: XYZ is the solemn place, where priesthood and laity assemble to pray for world pe

    I should have deleted the first "themselves". Sorry.

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