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    Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

    ''Compassion, in which all ethics must take root, can only attain its full breadth and depth if it embraces all living creatures and does not limit itself to mankind.''(Albert Schweitzr). Business ethics is the study and examination of moral and social responsibility in relation to business practices and decision-making in business, Concerning money earning, it's based on the way an employee is treated. First of all, an employee usually wants fiscal incentives in order to work harder. Another point is advertising, which the company uses. Lastly, investing in employees by giving courses can be lucrative for companies. Because better trained workers save in the short-run and raise up the business in the long-run. Therefore, businesses should stay ethical for three reasons, which are: improving earnings, consideration for the employees future, and open-mindedness for society.

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    Re: Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

    What is the purpose of your piece?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #3

    Re: Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

    This is an introductory paragraph for a persuasive essay

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    Re: Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

    What ems meant was: Is this homework?
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

    John, if this is homework, I can't help you correct it, but I can offer some high-level advice.

    Your sentences have almost no connection to one another. Your last sentence, presumably your topic sentence, contains ideas you haven't even mentioned. Your quote at the beginning has no bearing on the rest. I'm not sure you really have a clear idea of what you are arguing.

    Search this phrase: "the business case for ethics" and see what you find. Then start over.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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