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    help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    hello, my name Lukas i'm from Indonesia and I have some text about Indonesian food recipe, I need volunteers as a reader to comment my text if there is some grammatical error or some words which make you confused to understand this text

    Bakwan (Shrimp Fritter)
    Recipe

    Flour Dough

    • 500 gr white flour
    • 2 tablespoons rice flour
    • Water as you want

    Seasoning

    • 5 onion, mashed
    • 2 cloves garlic, mashed
    • Pepper, as you want
    • 1 sachet seasoning powder (beef / chicken)
    • Salt, as you want

    Bakwan Ingredients

    • 200 gr cabbage, slice slightly
    • 100 gr bean sprouts
    • 3 ribs scallion, slice slightly
    • 2 ribs celery, slice slightly
    • 1 small carrot, slices as thick or thin as you want
    • 100 gr shrimp, peeled

    Preparation

    • Prepare the bowl, put flour dough and seasoning then add the water as you want, beat flat.
    • Put the bakwan seasoning, beat again until truly flat.
    • Preheat the oil then fried the dough until golden brown, if you want to more crispy you can friend any longer.
    • Lift and leak through for a moment to reduce the cooking oil.
    Last edited by Tdol; 08-Apr-2014 at 14:56. Reason: Broken link removed

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    "Water as you want" is not going to work.
    How much water do I need? What will the dough look like when I've added enough water? Can you estimate how much I'll need with 500 gr of flour?
    Is gr "grams"?

    I can't believe you mean 5 onions.

    Sliced thinly

    Roll flat, not "beat"
    Fry the dough until golden brown. (Fry a bit longer if you want it more crispy)
    Drain the fried dough on a towel to remove some of the oil.

    What do I do with the Bakwan?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    • Salt, as you want- I would use Salt to taste

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    thank you very much for your help, about "as you want" can you give me solution that can be understood by American because in bahasa Indonesia this recipe for water and salt there is no specific of measurement. what about "as you like"?

    you can try to cook it, this food is one of traditional snack in Indonesia

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    To taste is not a fixed amount. For the water, I would recommend stating an amount. If you're writing the recipe for people who are not familiar with Indonesian food, then giving an amount would help them make a dough of about the right consistency. You can use approx. to show that the quantity of water is flexible.

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    OK, thank you

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    Re: help to check my Indonesian food recipe text

    For example, a recipe may say "3/4 cup" for the quantity in the list of ingredients and then in the instructions part say "Pour 1/2 cup water into the flour mixter and stir. Add more water in small amounts as needed so the dough forms a ball and comes away from the side of the bowl. If the dough becomes too sticky, add more flour."

    The biggest problem with your recipe is that you've told me how to fry the bread, but I don't know what to do with the rest.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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