[Grammar] Edit text to true grammar.

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yo2yo

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I am newbee.

I write next text:
I want open more online business, because i love make money online. To my regret, i don't have results in online business. Now i have knowledge about create websites, other web systems and html 5 apps.
I know, online business is not simple business, because businessman need more knowledge's and be experience in more technologies.
At 2014 year internet does more changes. We can see that there were more big start'ups. Now, one developer or businessman will be able to create popular site or page in social network. Another five years one boy or girl not will be able to make money from internet on its own site. After five years, at 2020 year, internet be doesn't give methods for make money for one people. Only groups of people will be able to make money from internet.
Now, i can create blog on blogspot or other social platforms. And get more traffic from PPC system to my page of blog. What a get from this? i can get minimal count of money. But! i want get more money. For this, i reading more ebook about create web ppc platforms and other trading systems. I want open PPC network. Oohhh..Adsense is big system. Certuinly, i don't can start adsense's analog. I can only open niche platform, for example, for mobile traffic. It's exclusive solution. And separate niche.
I think that the opening PPC system for mobile traffic is true idea.
Please edit this text and delete all errors and write descriptions why i have errors in text=)
 

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Welcome to the forum. :hi:

What is the purpose of your text? What are you going to do with it?
 

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Hello, Forum=):up:

I'm learning to write short texts. To improve the quality of grammar.
 

yo2yo

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I want open more online business, because i love make money online.
To my regret, i don't have results in online business.
Now i have knowledge about create websites, other web systems and html 5 apps.
I know, online business is not simple business, because businessman need more knowledge's and be experience in more technologies.
True, without errors.
At 2014 year internet does more changes. We can see that there were more big start'ups. Now, one developer or businessman will be able to create popular site or page in social network. Another five years one boy or girl not will be able to make money from internet on its own site. After five years, at 2020 year, internet be doesn't give methods for make money for one people. Only groups of people will be able to make money from internet.
Please, help me find grammar errors.
Now, i can create blog on blogspot or other social platforms. And get more traffic from PPC system to my page of blog.
True, without errors.
What a get from this? i can get minimal count of money. But! i want get more money. For this, i reading more ebook about create web ppc platforms and other trading systems. I want open PPC network. Oohhh..Adsense is big system. Certuinly, i don't can start adsense's analog. I can only open niche platform, for example, for mobile traffic. It's exclusive solution. And separate niche.
True, without errors.
I think that the opening PPC system for mobile traffic is true idea.
True, without errors.

Yeah???
 

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I have no idea what you mean by "True, without errors". If you mean "This is all correct and there are no errors in it" then you are wrong. There is at least one error in every sentence you wrote. You have also failed to capitalise the word "I" throughout your piece. Click on "Edit Post" on post #1, make every first person singular pronoun into a capital "I", and then click Save. Then we will look at the rest of your piece.
 
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