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    I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

    Is this sentence natural and correct?

    - I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart even I can imagine that beautiful girl.

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    Re: I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

    "The beating of my heart" not "heart beating of my heart." It's redundant.

    I don't know what you mean by the end of your sentence "even I can imagine..."

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    Re: I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

    I meant: The rhythmic beating of my hear. Sorry. That was a mistake.

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    Re: I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

    Quote Originally Posted by Freeguy View Post
    I meant: The rhythmic beating of my hear. Sorry. That was a mistake.
    No. You meant 'the rhythmic beating of my heart'.

    ... and what about the 'even I can imagine...' part? (Dave is asking you about this.)


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    Re: I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

    This may be just what might express your feelings. Though sad , it gives you a happy feeling .

    The lyrics are very nice, and easy to read.

    "... just the lonely beating of my heart."

    All Alone Am I, by Brenda Lee
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Oji2YHjI7a4


    This one has exquisite pictures of old movie stars.
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JJHvYU_y6xQ


    If you are a hopeless romantic, then you can say:

    I felt the lonely beating of my heart, even as I imagined that beautiful girl.



    --lotus
    Last edited by lotus888; 07-May-2014 at 18:45.

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