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The essay is my profile picture please take a loom i need feedback
Unfortunately, your post does not make sense. You do not have a profile picture and it would be impossible to write an essay in a space the size of a picture!
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Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.