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    Are these sentences natural?

    Are these sentences natural?

    1. One family said they had run from one room to room with windows exploding all around them
    1. As the rest of the stuff, the manager was nervous about the director's visit.
    3. My teacher said I'd never amount to anything strengthened my resolution to prove him wrong.
    4. No matter where she looked, she couldn't find what she needed.

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    #2

    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    I am not a teacher.

    Only 4. sounds natural, and I don't think it needs the comma

    You can improve the others by making the following small changes.

    1. Remove the second "one".
    2. Invert the two phrases, change "stuff" to "staff" and place "were" or "was" (depending on preference) after "as".
    3. Change "said" to "saying".

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    1. One family said they had run from room to room with windows exploding all around them.

    2. The manager was nervous about the director's visit, as were the rest of the staff. (OR The manager was nervous about visiting of the director, the rest of the staff were, too.)

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    My teacher's saying that I'd never amount to anything strengthened my resolve to prove him wrong.

    I changed the first ones. What about now?

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    #4

    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    I am not a teacher.

    Much better.

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    What's wrong with this form:

    The manager was nervous about visiting of the director, the rest of the staff were, too.

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    #6

    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    I am not a teacher.

    "...about visiting of the director..." doesn't make sense.

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    It's a run-on sentence. The comma after 'director' should be a semicolon.

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    It's a run-on sentence. The comma after 'director' should be a semicolon.
    What about this form:

    The manager was nervous about visiting of the director. The rest of the stuff were, too.

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    No. 'The manager was nervous about the director's visit. The rest of the staff were, too.'

    To return to #1, windows don't explode. They shatter.

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    Re: Are these sentences natural?

    You need to realise that "visiting of the director" does not mean anything. You need either "the director's visit" or "the visit of the director".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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