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    #1

    'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds ok?

    'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds ok? (by grammar)

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    #2

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    It's OK to me.

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    #3

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    A title for what? It's rather long.

    Your question should be 'Does this title ​sound OK?'

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    #4

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    Ok, thank you for the correction.

    I have a selling page on eBay. This title appears here - http://www.ebay.com/usr/adamchen2307.

    I am new here and English is not my native language so I have some grammar mistakes, but I am glad when people tell me where do I wrong.

    I need help on building a selling page on eBay. Actually, it has already been done and I just need to check if my grammar is correct in there. I list some items for sale on eBay from time to time and I know that wrong grammar may cause costumers to leave the page and not to buy from me.

    this is one of my selling pages: http://www.ebay.com/itm/111382375785...84.m1561.l2649 The item description is different from list to list of course, but all the rest of the page remains the same (payment, policies, etc..)

    I'll be glad if anybody can read some of it, and tell me about any mistakes.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 14-Jul-2014 at 20:58. Reason: Sorted out strange formatting

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    #5

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    anybody?

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    #6

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    I prefer "My goal is to ensure that you are a happy buyer". I see no need for the future. You could also use something like "An adamchen2307 buyer is a happy buyer!"
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #7

    Re: 'My main goal is to make sure that you'll be a happy buyer'- is this title sounds

    I just looked at your main page and found this:

    "Hello ! My name is Adam Chen and I leave in Israel ! All my items are free shipping items. You may return any item for a FULL REFUND within 14 days of receipt - all purchases are 100% risk-free. Please do not hesitate to contact me at any time!"


    It's mostly fine except that you live in Israel, not leave.

    I would say "All items include free shipping/free P&P".

    And you need to remove the space before the exclamation marks after "Hello" and "Israel". In fact, there is no need for an exclamation mark at all after "Israel".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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