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    Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    A gun battle has erupted close to the Pakistan airport that the a militants stormed one of the terminal previously. On the early Tuesday.

    A gunmen who are belong to the group of Taliban have attacked the busiest airport in the city of Karachi located in Pakistan without any causalities. They launched an attacked with gun and bomb assault to the airport terminal and at least 38 dead inclusive of the attackers. The latest attack is focused upon a hostel housing and airport security force.

    Flights have been suspended once at the airport until the further notice is announced from government.

    The above-mentioned attack have been identified in retaliation for the revenge from Taliban against the Pakistanís north-east control.

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    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by cyrusevilming View Post
    A gun battle has erupted close to the Pakistan airport that the a militants stormed one of the terminal previously.
    A gun battle has erupted close to the Pakistan airport that the militants took over previously.

    Now, I am not sure if that is what you are going for, but it is my best guess.

    Quote Originally Posted by cyrusevilming View Post
    A gunmen who are belong to the group of Taliban have attacked the busiest airport in the city of Karachi located in Pakistan without any causalities.
    Gunmen who are a part of the Taliban have attacked the busiest airport in the city of Karachi (located in Pakistan) without incurring any casualties.


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    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by cyrusevilming View Post
    They launched an attacked with gun and bomb assault to the airport terminal and at least 38 dead inclusive of the attackers. The latest attack is focused upon a hostel housing and airport security force.

    Flights have been suspended once at the airport until the further notice is announced from government.
    They launched an attack with small arms fire and hand grenades on the airport terminal, and at least 38 are dead on both sides. The latest attack is focused on a hostel housing an airport security force.

    There are no flights in or out of the airport at the present time.


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    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    Thank you your amendment. And I am appreciate that you can correct it strictly.

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    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by cyrusevilming View Post
    Thank you for your amendments. And I am appreciate that you can corrected it strictly.
    See above. Note that there is no need to write a new post to say "Thank you". Simply click on the "Thank" button in the bottom left-hand corner of any post you find helpful.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by cyrusevilming View Post
    Thank you your amendment. And I am appreciate that you can correct it strictly.
    Perhaps:


    Thank you for your corrections. I appreciate it that you could make things more clear.


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    #7

    Re: Plese help to amend the incorrect part, Thanks.

    No. As we said, there is no need to write a post to say "Thank you" regardless of how you word it. It wastes people's time when we open a thread thinking there is a new post containing further information or a follow-up question, only to find that it's just a "Thank you". It's not necessary. We have a "Thank" button for a reason.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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