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      • Native Language:
      • Italian
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      • Italy
      • Current Location:
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    • Join Date: Jul 2014
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    In your opinion, can I improve this statement introduction?

    In your opinion, can I improve this statement introduction?

    Before converting to Buddhism in 2011, I have always been fascinated by eastern Asia and its languages. My passion for english flourished throughout my education but never as fervent as Chinese and Thai. Even though my previous studies did not relate to them at all, thanks to my school and my english teacher I passed an intercultural exchange program contest in Thailand that brought me to discover my interest for Thai language.

    Thank you :)

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      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jan 2013
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    Re: In your opinion, can I improve this statement introduction?

    Suggested changes in RED:
    I had always been fascinated by eastern Asia and its languages
    but never as fervently as for Chinese and Thai
    E
    nglish
    Even though my previous studies did not relate to them at all, [Delete this phrase]
    English
    Thanks
    English
    teacher, [add comma]
    for the Thai language

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