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    Help with rewriting paragraph.

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    Re: Help with rewriting paragraph.

    That seems fine to me.

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    Re: Help with rewriting paragraph.

    The only change I would make would be to remove "among" near the end. It's sufficient to say "Choose from our existing designs".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Help with rewriting paragraph.

    Thanks for your help i appreciate it.

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    Re: Help with rewriting paragraph.

    Thanks I appreciate it.

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    Re: Help with rewriting paragraph.

    Quote Originally Posted by Chrisj380 View Post
    Thanks for your help. I appreciate it.
    Quote Originally Posted by Chrisj380 View Post
    Thanks. I appreciate it.
    Remember to use correct capitalisation and punctuation at all times.

    Also, note that there is no need to write a new post (let alone two new posts) to say "Thank you". Simply click the "Thank" button on any post you find helpful.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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