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    Stuck on Proper Grammar

    I have tried to reword, break up, etc the sentence "High-achieving performer who is driven by results and possesses a talent for leading by example with integrity." to no avail in attempt to correct the grammar. Any thoughts/hints?

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    Re: Stuck on Proper Grammar

    Welcome to Using English.
    As you probably know, this isn't a sentence, but rather a noun phrase. No doubt from a resume?

    So here is thought #1: High achiever, driven by results with a talent for leading by example. (There isn't a logical way to include "with integrity.")

    Thought #2: I don't mean to be unkind, but that is SO generic that it would fit a veterinary technician, a supply chain professional, a CEO or a stock clerk. This says nothing about you at all. You will need to be more specific about what you offer in terms of skills, not just your attitude.
    Last edited by Barb_D; 25-Jul-2014 at 15:21. Reason: typo
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Stuck on Proper Grammar

    Thanks Barb; appreciate the assist.

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    Re: Stuck on Proper Grammar

    Should be "driven by" not "driving by" - sorry about that!
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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