Retired English Teacher
I can't describe the sound of a metal object striking the ground. Are the following sentences correct? Or please help me rewrite them. Thank you a lot.
Michelle was a smartphone addict. One day while she was walking along the sidewalk, her eyes were glued to the screen, single-mindedly playing a mobile game. Before she knew it, she walked faster and faster, only to bump into a huge tree by the sidewalk. She got a bad cut over her left eye, and her phone fell onto the sidewalk with "clink-clank!"
...her phone fell onto the sidewalk with a big thud.
"Clink-clank" or "clinkety-clank" is more metal-to-metal or hard objects hitting metal objects.
Last edited by lotus888; 02-Aug-2014 at 00:11.