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I would like to ask if this sentence is correct: The quieter you become, the more securing you are able to be.

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It's not clear what you want to say I'm afraid.
 

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It's not clear what you want to say I'm afraid.

i mean grammatically correct. If the sentence does not break any of the rules of grammar.
 

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The problem is with the word 'securing'. It doesn't mean anything here.
The structure of the sentence is otherwise correct.
 

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so the correct sentense might be :The quieter you become, the more secure you are able to be ?
 

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Yes, that might be correct if you believe that quietness leads to security. More context would be necessary for it make sense to me though.
It makes grammatical sense.
 
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Why not "...the safer you will be"?
 
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That works, too (delete the full stop after 'be'), but the OP seems determined to use 'secure'.
 

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"Secure" has other connotations that "safe" does not. I thought the OP was talking about emotional security or something like that.

Job security and job safety are two different things.
 

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I am not a teacher.

Whatever the intended meaning of 'secure' it's the '...you are able to be' part that bothers me.

Does quietness lead to security or to the capability of security?

'The quieter you become, the more secure you are able to be', is all very well but are you more secure or just able to be more secure?

The bigger they are, the harder they are able to fall. I don't think so.
 

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It’s about a paraphrase of Kali Linux logo:

“The quieter you become the more you are able to hear”
 

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The original is not a 'paraphrase' of the above logo. A paraphrase says the same basic thing using different words.
I can understand the above. Can your explain the meaning of your example?
 
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Yes, I think the same. The expression "...you are able to be..." could be an ineffective attempt to express something from a completely different language structure.

And “The quieter you become the more you are able to hear” can work in this case, but may not be used to express other meaning.
 
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