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    #1

    A frozen dialogue?

    I have made this dialogue myself for a textbook. Could you help me change it a little so that it would sound more idiomatic, not so "frozen"? Or is it OK as it is?

    S1: Anna, do you ever have a lie-in in the morning?
    S2: Well, it all depends. When I have my first lesson free, I do have a lie-in sometimes. And what about you, Liz?
    S1: I always wake up on time, at 7, and I get up at once. I never lie-in after I wake up.
    S2: You’re so well-organised.
    S1: I am indeed.
    If I were a native speaker of English, I would never shut up. :-)

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    #2

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    I don't know what you mean by 'frozen'.

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    #3

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    He means stiff and unnatural.

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    #4

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    Quote Originally Posted by englishhobby View Post
    I have made this dialogue myself for a textbook. Could you help me change it a little so that it would sound more idiomatic, not so "frozen"? Or is it OK as it is?

    S1: Anna, do you ever have a lie-in in the morning?
    S2: Well, it all depends. When I have my first lesson free, I do have a lie-in sometimes. And what about you, Liz?
    S1: I always wake up on time, at 7, and I get up at once. I never lie-in after I wake up.
    S2: You’re so well-organised.
    S1: I am indeed.
    - Anna, do you ever have a lie-in?
    - Yeah, sometimes. If I've got a free period first thing, then yeah. You?
    - I'm always straight up at 7. No lie-ins.
    - Wow, you're organised.
    - Yup.

    I might have gone a bit too far away from stiff and unnatural, but it's pretty natural and colloquial.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    Stilted might work better than frozen.

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    #6

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    - Anna, do you ever have a lie-in?
    - Yeah, sometimes. If I've got a free period first thing, then yeah. You?
    - I'm always straight up at 7. No lie-ins.
    - Wow, you're organised.
    - Yup.

    I might have gone a bit too far away from stiff and unnatural, but it's pretty natural and colloquial.
    Thank you, now it's very lively. Will it be OK, if I change "yup" to "I am"?
    If I were a native speaker of English, I would never shut up. :-)

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    #7

    Re: A frozen dialogue?

    Yes.

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