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    A stilted dialogue

    I am making dialogues for a textbook. Here's one that is a bit stilted, as I am not a native speaker. Could you improve it a little so that it would sound as a natural exchange between two university students?

    S1: What do you usually do in Spanish class, Charlotte?
    S2: It's difficult to say in one word. Lots of different things.
    S1: For example?
    S2: Well, we often have conversations on a particular topic in small groups – obviously in Spanish! – And then we discuss it together at the end. And you in your French classes?
    S1: We do a lot of listening and the things you’ve described, too.

    If I were a native speaker of English, I would never shut up. :-)

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    Re: A stilted dialogue

    Quote Originally Posted by englishhobby View Post
    I am making dialogues for a textbook. Here's one that is a bit stilted, as I am not a native speaker. Could you improve it a little so that it would sound as a natural exchange between two university students?

    S1: What do you usually do in Spanish class, Charlotte?
    S2: It's difficult to say in one word. Lots of different things.
    S1: For example?
    S2: Well, we often have conversations on a particular topic in small groups – obviously in Spanish! – and then we discuss it [all ] together afterwards. What do you do in French class?
    S1: We do a lot of listening plus conversations like you’ve described, too.

    (S2 only talked about one thing, so there are no "things")
    Last edited by Barb_D; 20-Aug-2014 at 21:46.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: A stilted dialogue

    I have no problem with "things" She gave one example. I see no need for "all" before "together" And you have repeated "in" before "French class".

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    Re: A stilted dialogue

    Fixed my in-in.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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