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  1. B45
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    I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on the su

    I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on the summer itinerary, but unfortunately, there were some things that I had to leave out, because as you know, we're attempting to grow our business and for us to be able to do that, I will have to stay in Russia until I get the work done.

    Please correct and check punctuation for me.

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    Re: I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on th

    You might want to think about making this more than one sentence. Do you mean "itinerary" or "agenda"?

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    Re: I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on th

    I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on the summer agenda, but unfortunately, there were some things that I had to leave out. As you know, we're attempting to grow our business, and for us to be able to do that, I will have to stay in Russia until I get the work done.

    What about now? Better?

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    Re: I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put it on th

    I tried really hard to mix and match all the things I want to do and put them on the summer agenda, but, unfortunately, there were some things that I had to leave out. As you know, we're attempting to grow our business, and for us to be able to do that I will have to stay in Russia until I get the work done.
    Really good. One word change, one comma added, one comma omitted.

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