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    #1

    Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this wo

    Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this world.

    Does this make sense?
    Does it have any grammatical errors?

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    #2

    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    It doesn't make sense.

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    #3

    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    Does the one below make sense?
    'Following the scents of flowers, one could see the view not seeming to belong to this world.'

    Not a teacher.
    Last edited by Matthew Wai; 25-Aug-2014 at 12:11. Reason: Added 'Not a teacher'.

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    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    No, Matthew, it doesn't. Don't forget to add 'Not a teacher'.

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    Welcome to the forum, wisdomeyed.

    Tell us in simple terms what you want the sentence to mean.

    If it is not your sentence, tell us where you read it and who wrote it.

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    #5

    [What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

    wisdomeyed, it wasn't necessary to start a new thread to answer my question. I have merged this thread with the earlier one.

    Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this world.

    This is the original sentence.

    I wanted to say...

    As I followed the scents of the flowers, I found a such beautiful scenery that didn't seem to belong to this world(earth).

    How can I say it concisely using a participial construction?
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 25-Aug-2014 at 12:58.

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    Re: [What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

    Not to me.

    You could try something like Following the scents of the flowers, I came across an unearthly beauty. However, it's still not a good sentence to me.

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    Re: [What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

    The OP wants a participial construction, is 'a beautiful scene hardly existing in the world' acceptable?

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    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    No.

    How about "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed to belong to another world"?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #9

    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    No.

    How about "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed to belong to another world"?

    I would prefer a more explicit indication that the other world is more glorious than our world.

    (something like)
    "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed worthy of (another)(a better) world."

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    #10

    Re: Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to thi

    Quote Originally Posted by Matthew Wai View Post
    'a beautiful scene hardly existing in the world'
    Is it unacceptable because it doesn't make sense?

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