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    Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    We need to provide our work details for final accounting upon completion of the each project. As you are aware, we could have taken the necessary information from the system earlier, but now we don't have access to the system. If you could facilitate the system by sharing, we can have access to the system so that we can provide our work details accordingly.

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    Re: Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by JRD View Post
    We need to provide our work details for a final accounting upon completion of the each project. As you are aware, we could have taken the necessary information from the system earlier, but now we don't have access to the system. If you could facilitate the system by sharing, we can have access to the system so that we can provide our work details accordingly.
    I am puzzled about the "facilitate the system" part, but it might make sense, but I can't be sure because I have no idea what you are talking about.


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    Re: Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    Thank you for helping me to correct my sentences.
    I want to say that if we can have the access to the system, we can give our details accordingly. Shall write the last part in my sentences as above?

    Thank you for your help

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    Re: Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    If you could facilitate the system by sharing, we can have access to the system so that we can provide our details accordingly.
    If you could provide us the access to the system again (I presume using security codes), we would then be able to provide the work details for final accounting.

    not a teacher

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    Re: Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    Your sentence is good, but I would leave out "the" before "access".

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    Re: Please help me to fix erros in my sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by JRD View Post
    Thank you for helping me to correct my sentences.
    I want to say that if we can have the access to the system, we can give our details accordingly. Shall I write the last part in my sentences as above?

    Thank you for your help
    No, don't write it the way you have it. Instead, write shorter, simpler sentences. In fact, do it the way you did it in the sentences I copied (with the corrections included). Also, when you start a new thread make the title specific to the question you ask in that thread. (I had trouble finding this one. The thread title is too generic.)

    I guess that's all for now. But remember -- don't try to cram everything you have to say into one really long sentence. Instead, keep your sentences brief and to the point. You want people to understand what you are saying, don't you?


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