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    #1

    please help

    Please help check for me..

    Refer our teleconversation today, it is better for you to come over to our office to resolve the problem on the project web system.

    Kindly please bring your laptop on the next meeting at xxx office.
    Last edited by fifie_danny; 01-Oct-2014 at 11:49.

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    Re: please help

    In my opinion "teleconversation" is business jargon, I've never heard anyone say it in normal conversation. I think you should avoid it.

    It isn't clear to me whether the problem is in the project web system, or you are using the project web system to resolve a problem somewhere else. However, you will both know what the situation is and keeping the "on" covers both cases.

    With reference to our telephone conversation today, it is better for you to come over to our office to resolve the problem on the project web system.
    Please bring your laptop to the next meeting at xxxx office.
    Last edited by JMurray; 01-Oct-2014 at 23:09. Reason: typo

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    #3

    Re: please help

    Hi JMurray,

    The problem is in the project web. They' ve problem to access in that system.

    How about this sentence....

    Hi,

    Please bring your laptop to the next meeting at xx office to resolve the problem on the project web system.

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    Re: please help

    I'm not sure why you have deleted the part about the telephone conversation.
    Now I know that the project web system has the problem, I would probably use "with", although "in" would be fine too.
    Here are two versions you can use.

    With reference to our telephone conversation today, it is better for you to come over to our office to resolve the problem with the project web system.
    Please bring your laptop to the next meeting at xxxx office.


    If you don't want to mention the phone conversation, then just write this.

    Please bring your laptop to the next meeting at xxxx office to resolve the problem with the project web system.

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