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I have just finish this paragraph. But i can know whether i got any mistake or not, so please help me to correct what is wrong in that. thanks so much.
"I came to holy land on a morning Sunday. In front of me appreared a huge and breathtaking landscape which look like really heaven. The sky was deep blue with strip of white clouds stretching out. Far from the horizon, ranges of mountains which was covered by a deep green of trees followed each other rising upon the sky. There was a very limplid river quietly flew toward the horizon reflecting on surface the image of above sky. Running along two side of the river was many woods alternated each other. Dominating on that colourful picture, A little wood boat softly was sailing down the river. It look as if going to the end of the sky."
1. Replacing "sailing soflty down the river" with "sailing peacefully between the river's verdant banks." This construction echos for the reader the image of vegetation which you took the time to craft in your artful description of the river's banks. "Verdant" is a word which American readers anticipate in written language, but rarely use in the spoken form. I would not advise "verdant" as a part of your every day speech, but in the written form it is an effective conveyor of the pastoral scene you created.
2. In your final sentence, a more sophisticated and poetic rendering might be: "From the distance, the little boat seemed on a journey to the end of the world." Using "world" instead of "sky" is more in keeping with the altitude and speed of the craft, as we reflexively associate flight and velocity with the sky.
I am only a layman, or I would have a better opinion to offer. The changes that I made and the suggestions I made, I am confident are good advice and an improvement in each case. I hope that someone more skilled will offer further guidance, and I wish you well - departing with gratitude for the evocative picture that you painted in my mind's eye. :)