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    Can you please check my grammar

    Hello! Could you please edit my letter? It is very important for me! Thanks in advance
    Dear Mr.Marat
    Before, you used to communicate with my colleague Gusewa. But unfortunately she left our company. From this day on, I am in the charge to communicate with you. That’s why, if you have any questions, I ask you to write directly to me.
    Also I want to inform that our company is ready to make an order, you can find an attached excel file in the application. Please confirm receipt of excel file. If you can any questions please let me know.
    Last edited by EkaterinaVlasowa; 27-Oct-2014 at 19:29. Reason: added

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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by EkaterinaVlasowa View Post
    Hello! Could you please edit my letter? It is very important for me! Thanks in advance
    Don't thank me in advance. Instead, buy me lunch.


    Quote Originally Posted by EkaterinaVlasowa View Post
    Dear Mr.Marat
    Before, you used to communicate with my colleague Gusewa.
    Say:

    You used to communicate with my colleague Gusewa.

    The "used to" by itself tells the reader that it happened in the past. Do not add Before.

    Quote Originally Posted by EkaterinaVlasowa View Post
    But unfortunately she left our company. From this day on, I am in charge of communicating with you. Thatís why, if you have any questions, I ask you to write directly to me.
    Also I want to inform you that our company is ready to make an order. You can find an attached Excel file in the application. Please confirm receipt of Excel file. If you can any questions, please let me know.
    Please note that a person is put in charge of something, and after that the person is in charge of that thing. Do you see what I am in charge of here? (Nothing. That's what I'm in charge of.)


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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Don't thank me in advance. Instead, buy me lunch.

    haha, ok should I go to USA, and but you a lunch? No problem.

    Thank you very much.
    In that case, I should not use in charge of. Could I say instead of that: From this day on, I will work with your company.
    Also, why did you highlighted
    inform you ? Is there any problem?

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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by EkaterinaVlasowa View Post
    haha, ok should I go to USA, and buy you lunch? No problem.

    Thank you very much.
    In that case, I should not use in charge of. Could I say instead of that: From this day on, I will work with your company.
    Also, why did you
    highlight inform you ? Is there any problem?
    No! You should definitely use "in charge of" instead of what was there before (in charge to). If I put something in red that means a change (correction) has been made. (Note that "inform you" is a necessary change to the original.)

    The original post isn't very long, so it should be easy to tell what changes have been suggested.

    Welcome to the forum.

    Last edited by Tarheel; 28-Oct-2014 at 22:14. Reason: Put space between "highlight" and "inform"

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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    It's rather wordy. I would say "Please note that I have now taken over from Guwesa, who has left the company. From now on, please contact me with any queries. Also, I attach an Excel document detailing our latest order. Please confirm receipt of the order. Do not hesitate to contact me if you have any questions."
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    (Thanks to emsr2d2)

    Please note that I have now taken over from Guwesa, who has left the company. From now on, please contact me with any queries. Also, I attach an Excel document detailing our latest order. Please confirm receipt of the order. Contact me if you have any questions.

    Shorter still.

    Last edited by emsr2d2; 28-Oct-2014 at 23:24. Reason: tiny typo

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    I agree with tarheel. The corrections to your grammer is spot on. I always proofread a few times to make sure I don't type the same word twice or write an incomplete thought. Read aloud what you write and ask yourself if it sounds right to you. Good job tarheel.

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    Re: Can you please check my grammar

    The extra words 'please do not hesitate to..' sounds slightly more polite especially in the Asian context.

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