Boris Tatarenko
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I've written a story about UFOs and I would like you to check it. It's not my homework.
Does it sound good and natural? What would you suggest? Did I describe it well?
An unfolded mystery
Everybody has heard and read a lot of myths about UFOs. However, there is an interesting story about the Englishman who claims that he was abducted by a bunch of aliens.
It happened in 1965 in the South of England. Mr. Burton, who is a retiree, was keen on fishing. One day the weather forecast was good enough: there was a full moon and the sky was clear. Mr. Burton was an avid fisherman, that’s why he could not miss such a good chance to fish.
He decided to set off really early. Doubtlessly, He didn’t expect anything strange and mysterious to happen. Mr. Burton was going to the his favorite point when, suddenly, he was blinded by a bright light which he had never seen there before. The whole field was lit up and there were some strange noises. Mr. Burton could not believe his eyes - it was a flying saucer. Certainly, he had heard a lot of stories about UFOs, but he always laughed at and considered them to be made-up.
When the strange flying object landed, the oval door opened and two creatures appeared. Mr. Burton squinted to see who they were. He was absolutely shocked when he realized that they were extraterrestrial. It was impossible for him to escape because they would certainly catch him if he ran. That’s why he kept standing and staring at the aliens.
They came up to him and started to speak English with a funny accent. Despite the fact that Mr. Burton was frightened, he managed to survey them and he noticed that they were wearing green suits and holding space guns. They explained to him that he needed to follow them, otherwise they would force him to follow. Mr. Burton didn’t have a choice but follow them. Besides, he lost his words when he saw extraterrstials went through the wall like ghosts. They came out on the field where there was their spaceship. Mr. Burton claimed there were a plenty of oval windows and everything was beaming and shining like a rainbow. He didn’t even notice how he went up to the UFO because he was completely awed by the light.
The spaceship looked small outside, but it was really spacious with a lot of panels with buttons and several strange rooms. The extraterrestrial told Mr. Burton to stand under the red light and wait for several minutes. The old man was bewildered because they constantly threatened him with their weapons. Moreover, Mr. Burton wasn’t wearing his glasses that day and that was the problem: he couldn’t find the red light! He was looking for it until one of the aliens pointed him where he was supposed to stay. The old man felt how they were examining and scanning him with strange devices, but it wasn’t painful at all.
Suddenly, all panels turned off and Mr. Burton started worrying, he thought they were going to kill him. All of a sudden, the door opened and the alien came up to the man and explained that he didn’t fit their experiment, because he was too old and ill. Mr. Burton didn’t understand what it meant, but the alien smiled and said that they would bring him back. Finally, they left Mr. Burton on the field where they had abducted him and flew away.
Next morning, Mr. Burton went to the police office and told what he had seen. The police could not believe. They thought Mr. Burton went crazy because of the loneliness. Several hours later, the old man received a call from the Ministry of Defence and he was told to keep silence about that night. Mr. Burton didn’t forget that day and he was silent for such a long time. Several years later, he decided to say everything he knew. He started giving a lot of interviews and writing books about UFO’s. Mr.Burton is a famous writer now.
Does it sound good and natural? What would you suggest? Did I describe it well?
An unfolded mystery
Everybody has heard and read a lot of myths about UFOs. However, there is an interesting story about the Englishman who claims that he was abducted by a bunch of aliens.
It happened in 1965 in the South of England. Mr. Burton, who is a retiree, was keen on fishing. One day the weather forecast was good enough: there was a full moon and the sky was clear. Mr. Burton was an avid fisherman, that’s why he could not miss such a good chance to fish.
He decided to set off really early. Doubtlessly, He didn’t expect anything strange and mysterious to happen. Mr. Burton was going to the his favorite point when, suddenly, he was blinded by a bright light which he had never seen there before. The whole field was lit up and there were some strange noises. Mr. Burton could not believe his eyes - it was a flying saucer. Certainly, he had heard a lot of stories about UFOs, but he always laughed at and considered them to be made-up.
When the strange flying object landed, the oval door opened and two creatures appeared. Mr. Burton squinted to see who they were. He was absolutely shocked when he realized that they were extraterrestrial. It was impossible for him to escape because they would certainly catch him if he ran. That’s why he kept standing and staring at the aliens.
They came up to him and started to speak English with a funny accent. Despite the fact that Mr. Burton was frightened, he managed to survey them and he noticed that they were wearing green suits and holding space guns. They explained to him that he needed to follow them, otherwise they would force him to follow. Mr. Burton didn’t have a choice but follow them. Besides, he lost his words when he saw extraterrstials went through the wall like ghosts. They came out on the field where there was their spaceship. Mr. Burton claimed there were a plenty of oval windows and everything was beaming and shining like a rainbow. He didn’t even notice how he went up to the UFO because he was completely awed by the light.
The spaceship looked small outside, but it was really spacious with a lot of panels with buttons and several strange rooms. The extraterrestrial told Mr. Burton to stand under the red light and wait for several minutes. The old man was bewildered because they constantly threatened him with their weapons. Moreover, Mr. Burton wasn’t wearing his glasses that day and that was the problem: he couldn’t find the red light! He was looking for it until one of the aliens pointed him where he was supposed to stay. The old man felt how they were examining and scanning him with strange devices, but it wasn’t painful at all.
Suddenly, all panels turned off and Mr. Burton started worrying, he thought they were going to kill him. All of a sudden, the door opened and the alien came up to the man and explained that he didn’t fit their experiment, because he was too old and ill. Mr. Burton didn’t understand what it meant, but the alien smiled and said that they would bring him back. Finally, they left Mr. Burton on the field where they had abducted him and flew away.
Next morning, Mr. Burton went to the police office and told what he had seen. The police could not believe. They thought Mr. Burton went crazy because of the loneliness. Several hours later, the old man received a call from the Ministry of Defence and he was told to keep silence about that night. Mr. Burton didn’t forget that day and he was silent for such a long time. Several years later, he decided to say everything he knew. He started giving a lot of interviews and writing books about UFO’s. Mr.Burton is a famous writer now.