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    Question Basic to Advanced

    Hello everyone,
    Here is a text that I want to use for about me section in my website. Can you correct any mistakes in it and make the language advanced by maybe using difficult words or whatever.
    " I am a teenager who was born on a day of Sagitarius,I live in the sunny side of life, The Maldives and I am a memeber of the ALAM family.
    I am intrested in gothic and futuristic graphics and I like designing graphics, creating animations and painting and drawing pictures.
    I usually listens to gothic songs like songs by Cradle of Filth and rap songs like songs by Linkin Park, but I listens to almost all kinds of music and my favourite track of all time is danger mouse's dark march and favourite song of this time is eminem's mockingbird.
    Sometimes I play PC games and my favourite games are Sierra's Empire Earth and Rockstar game's Grand Theft Auto series. Red Storm Entertatinment's Ghost Recon is one of my number one action games.
    I enjoy swimming, playing, riding around and mostly having fun."
    Thanks to anyone who wants to help
    Last edited by my boss; 29-Apr-2006 at 09:01.

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    Re: Basic to Advanced

    in the sunny side of life- It would be on the sunny side, or in a sunny place
    I usually listens- listen
    danger mouse's- use capital letters for names
    of this time- I'd use 'at this time'
    one of my number one- a bit illogical- you can only really have one number one game.

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    Smile Re: Basic to Advanced

    Thanks for your help!

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    Re: Basic to Advanced

    You're welcome.

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